We have been reading War Horse by Michael Morpurgo and learning about life during World War I. We wrote letters to Albert from Joey, to explain his experiences of war.
I am writing to you from No-Man's Land. I am surrounded by the bodies of dead people and this petrifies me. Bombs are blasting all around me and I have no way of escaping. The gun fire is deafening and my ears have constant ringing. I am trying to be brave on the outside but inside, I am terrified. My wish is for you to be beside me as I am so lonely and miserable.
I have a terrible life now. I am lucky to be alive though. Every day I wake up to machine guns rattling and people screaming in pain.
Sometimes I feel so hurt inside. Why was I taken to where my life is on a tipping point? One time I was stuck in the middle of No Man's Land and it was like anything that I touched would instantly explode.
The worst thing about it is I don't get well fed. I would do anything just to taste hot, sweet oats and mash. It makes me feel so sleepy and dreamy. How do you make it taste so good?
I miss you so much. I wish you were here with me. We would make a great team.
I am writing to you from No Man's Land where I'm sitting in a muddy field. I miss your voice making me happy and I am just petrified hearing all those bombs around me. I have not eaten for weeks now. I am so starving that I will eat anything but everything is destroyed.
Sometimes I feel so hurt inside. Why is that? Is it because I was taken from you, my friend? I am exhausted from all the orders but I just could not disobey them. I so wish you were here with me to take care of me like you always have. You are the best friend anyone could ever have. I feel so brave inside about the war but I'm still not brave enough.
I am so frightened at war. I am writing to you from No Man's Land. All I can see are guns shooting up into the sky. All I can do is keep on running and running.
I am very depressed and scared. Everywhere I go I see dead bodies of innocent people. I wish I could come back home. I miss you! All I see is dark, black, gloomy sky.
Sorry this is a short letter but this is all the time I've got, Albert.
Sorry this might be a short letter but I haven't got much time. I have an the scariest experience ever. If you don't know where I am, I am lost in the middle of No Man's Land. I've met some new friends and I think you'd like them but I'm so sad. My legs are cut to pieces. I'm starving and I haven't eaten for weeks. My Captain's dead - he got shot. It is ridiculous. I am sick of the sound of bombs and gunfire 24-7. Hopefully I'll be coming home soon.
Oh how I miss you. The war so far has been a terrible experience. I hope you never have to go through this. I'm sad to have to tell you this, but Captain Nicholls is dead. I almost didn't cope but another horse called Topthorn was there to help me through the pain. Although that isn't the only death I've witnessed. There have been very many more including Topthorn, one of my two best friends. I think out of all of the very good friends I've made and lost in the war, there is one who has survived but she came close to dying as well. Her name is Emily, a girl about your age who cared for me and Topthorn and rode us around a field just like you did with me. I really miss you and can not wait to see you. You would be so proud of me if you were here. I'd love to go home.
I really enjoyed reading this. I have never read War Horse but this piece gives me a good idea about what happens in the story. Well done! Mrs Carpenter
There have been some truly fantastic pieces of work created here and on other subjects. Your use of language and imagery is incredibly evocative and you are able to stir the imagination of your reader in just a short space of time. You are a truly inspirational team of young authors and I look forward to reading more from you. Keep up the brilliant work Team Palmer and who knows, maybe one day we will be reading one of your own books that you've written!!
I have been incredibly impressed with all the writing published here. The use of language and imagery is brilliant. The way the authors have been able to create a sense of emotion in just a few short lines is a brilliant art which I hope will continue to be encouraged. Keep up the brilliant work Team Palmer and I hope to see some of you becoming budding authors in a couple of years time!! Well done Clare
To my beloved friend,
ReplyDeleteI am writing to you from No-Man's Land. I am surrounded by the bodies of dead people and this petrifies me. Bombs are blasting all around me and I have no way of escaping. The gun fire is deafening and my ears have constant ringing. I am trying to be brave on the outside but inside, I am terrified. My wish is for you to be beside me as I am so lonely and miserable.
Hope to see you soon,
Joey
By Lilly, Gary, Caden, Yusuf and Tyler
This is very descriptive writing, puts the reader right into the scene and gives a good sense of how Joey is really feeling - well done
DeleteWell done table and thank you miss spencer for helping are table we ar learnin a lot from you and from mrs palmer.
Deletelilly
You all deserve the credit for this piece of writing. You all have brilliant ideas.
DeleteTo my only friend, Albert,
ReplyDeleteI have a terrible life now. I am lucky to be alive though. Every day I wake up to machine guns rattling and people screaming in pain.
Sometimes I feel so hurt inside. Why was I taken to where my life is on a tipping point? One time I was stuck in the middle of No Man's Land and it was like anything that I touched would instantly explode.
The worst thing about it is I don't get well fed. I would do anything just to taste hot, sweet oats and mash. It makes me feel so sleepy and dreamy. How do you make it taste so good?
I miss you so much. I wish you were here with me. We would make a great team.
From your beloved, Joey.
By Kishari
I like the way you have separated the different elements to your letter, in separate paragraphs Kishari. It describes how Joey is feeling very well
DeleteTo my friend,
ReplyDeleteI am writing to you from No Man's Land where I'm sitting in a muddy field. I miss your voice making me happy and I am just petrified hearing all those bombs around me. I have not eaten for weeks now. I am so starving that I will eat anything but everything is destroyed.
Sometimes I feel so hurt inside. Why is that? Is it because I was taken from you, my friend? I am exhausted from all the orders but I just could not disobey them. I so wish you were here with me to take care of me like you always have. You are the best friend anyone could ever have. I feel so brave inside about the war but I'm still not brave enough.
Joey
By Zainab
A very emotional piece of writing Zainab. You have talked about different aspects and I liked how Joey was questioning why he was feeling like he did.
DeleteWow Zainab what a touching letter! I can actually imagine myself there with you! Well done!
DeleteMrs Barham
Dear my long lost friend,
ReplyDeleteI am so frightened at war. I am writing to you from No Man's Land. All I can see are guns shooting up into the sky. All I can do is keep on running and running.
I am very depressed and scared. Everywhere I go I see dead bodies of innocent people. I wish I could come back home. I miss you! All I see is dark, black, gloomy sky.
Sorry this is a short letter but this is all the time I've got, Albert.
Yours faithfully, Joey.
By Emily
Oh Emily, I can really feel Joey's pain! It's heart wrenching. Your word choices are well thought out and paint the picture of misery. Well done.
DeleteYou have used short sentences to really create the mood of tension and sadness Emily.
DeleteMrs Hanks
I was really impressed with this piece of writing! Very emotive! Well done Emily!
DeleteMrs Carpenter
Eden nixon: I am so impressed in the wow words you have used!!!!!!!Well done
DeleteTo my life-long friend,
ReplyDeleteSorry this might be a short letter but I haven't got much time. I have an the scariest experience ever. If you don't know where I am, I am lost in the middle of No Man's Land. I've met some new friends and I think you'd like them but I'm so sad. My legs are cut to pieces. I'm starving and I haven't eaten for weeks. My Captain's dead - he got shot. It is ridiculous. I am sick of the sound of bombs and gunfire 24-7. Hopefully I'll be coming home soon.
Yours faithfully,
Joey.
By Tonis
Poor Joey! You have described a scene of pure misery. Words are used very effectively to show how Joey is feeling. Well done, Tonis. Mrs Jurczak
DeleteWhat a thought provoking letter!
DeleteMiss Davis
Wow Joey so much information and thoughts in just one paragraph! Keep up the good work!
DeleteMrs Barham
Wow Joey what a lovely letter. You have included so much information in one paragraph. Keep up the good work!
DeleteMrs Barham
Dear my beloved companion,
ReplyDeleteOh how I miss you. The war so far has been a terrible experience. I hope you never have to go through this. I'm sad to have to tell you this, but Captain Nicholls is dead. I almost didn't cope but another horse called Topthorn was there to help me through the pain. Although that isn't the only death I've witnessed. There have been very many more including Topthorn, one of my two best friends. I think out of all of the very good friends I've made and lost in the war, there is one who has survived but she came close to dying as well. Her name is Emily, a girl about your age who cared for me and Topthorn and rode us around a field just like you did with me.
I really miss you and can not wait to see you. You would be so proud of me if you were here. I'd love to go home.
Yours sincerely,
Joey
By Elise
Very good Elise.:-)
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading this. I have never read War Horse but this piece gives me a good idea about what happens in the story. Well done!
DeleteMrs Carpenter
everyone's work is amazing!
ReplyDeleteliams mom
This is a very powerful letter Elise, you have really captured the character's feelings by using interesting vocabulary. Well done!
ReplyDeleteMrs Trevelyan
There have been some truly fantastic pieces of work created here and on other subjects. Your use of language and imagery is incredibly evocative and you are able to stir the imagination of your reader in just a short space of time. You are a truly inspirational team of young authors and I look forward to reading more from you. Keep up the brilliant work Team Palmer and who knows, maybe one day we will be reading one of your own books that you've written!!
ReplyDeleteI have been incredibly impressed with all the writing published here. The use of language and imagery is brilliant. The way the authors have been able to create a sense of emotion in just a few short lines is a brilliant art which I hope will continue to be encouraged. Keep up the brilliant work Team Palmer and I hope to see some of you becoming budding authors in a couple of years time!!
ReplyDeleteWell done
Clare