Here are some of our favourite extracts. What do you think?
Thursday 25 September 2014
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We have been using our knowledge about the Pompeii disaster to write newspaper reports. We have had to be objective and write in a serious, formal style. We used reported speech and powerful vocabulary to add drama to the story and engage our readers.
Here are some of our favourite extracts. What do you think?
Here are some of our favourite extracts. What do you think?
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Yesterday afternoon disaster struck Pompeii. ALL of the villagers died, the people who lived close could see the people of Pompeii running away. People were destroyed. First there was a slight rumbling of the earth but the people were used to that so they just carried on with their normal lives.
ReplyDeleteTaylor
Sad times! looking forward to seeing all the hard work Team Palmer have put into their assembly.
DeleteMrs Jordan
The eruption petrified most of the citizens and guilt was the only thought on their minds. The unlucky towns people were frozen in time, most of these beings went to get their belongings after the fifth wave, but didn't make it past the sixth wave.
ReplyDeleteIsaac
You have used lovely descriptive words Isaac. Really draws a person as a reader in and really explains the severity of the disaster.
DeleteMiss Degville (Student Teacher)
Few made it out alive, for people went back to collect their belongings. Pliny the younger tried to warn them, but it was too late. Pliny the younger has only one regret, that is why, they were living amongst the devastating volcano. He believes that the beast will awake again, but until then it rests in peace, among mother nature. But magnificent land will fill with life yet again.
ReplyDeleteGeorge H
Tragedy was caused by Mount Vesuvius in Pompeii. Most people in the loved city thought it was normal because tremors and rumbles happen every twelve months.
ReplyDeleteThere was an eye witness called Pliny the younger who said that "I am so happy that the volcano is dormant, but I felt that he was perishing the world and the world with me." He thought that innocent people lost their precious lives and everything that they ever loved.
Shanice
A very moving and poetic quote!
DeleteMr Qayyum
No lava came out the top of the "guardian." Ash, debris and molten rock soared 12 to 14 km high. The North side of the huge mountain shattered and caused a volcanic cloud. The beautiful city of Pompeii was no more than 6 meters of ash. 2 thousand citizens lives were lost in mere darkness. The tragedy of the eruption started at 1 PM . Pompeii and Herculaneum were the 2 main victims. Herculaneum is closer to mount Vesuvius. People in Pompeii were protected by its town walls until the 8th pyroclastic current when it surged through the town and killed every one in its path.
ReplyDeleteGeorge L ;-)
A surge of molten rock and superheated poisonous gas poured down the mountain swallowing everything and everyone in its path. Nothing could stand in its way no mater what.
ReplyDeleteSunny
Wow! Sunny, your description really captures the enormity of the disaster.
DeleteMrs Palmer
A mild rumbling shook the ground, glasses clinked on the shelves, doors creaked and candles flickered. The people of Pompeii did not know that they were given a hint by the mysterious Vesuvius ...
ReplyDeleteKishari
You have chosen some effective phrases to magpie, Kishari.
DeleteMrs Palmer
At midday there was a terrible earth tremor, obliterating most of the buildings and creating serious damage and havoc .The panicked towns people rushed to escape as the rumbling earth tremor merged into a major deadly earthquake warning them of their up coming disaster.
ReplyDeleteBy Elise
Great vocabulary - I like merged, obliterating, havoc and deadly.
DeleteMrs Palmer
The first warning was a rumbling earthquake but everyone thought it was a regular day when an earthquake hits Pompeii and Herculaneum. Soon after black and grey ash coved the volcano, Mount Vesuvius.
ReplyDeleteAt around noon mount Vesuvius erupted with a crash and a boom. Everyone was running like mad and didn't know what to do next.
Amy
I like how you have used 'soon after' and 'at around noon' to start your sentences and tell the reader when the events happened.
DeleteMrs Palmer
The first warning signs were an earthquake that made Pompeii and Herculania
ReplyDeleterumble. The citizens went on with their day to day lives. When what they thought was a peaceful mountain that protected them turned out to be a monstrous volcano. MOUNT VESUVIUS!!
Alex R
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ReplyDeleteYesterday, destruction struck Pompeii after the volcano; their protector Mt Vesuvius, let out an all mighty roar which killed a total of 2000 citizens of the city.
This all started on their normal Tuesday. It was the 24 August 79AD. The citizens were working hard when the ground started to shake and the earth began to tremor, but because it has happened before, they didn't make a big deal of it. Then it began their powerful guardian erupted. Pots smashed and cutlery fell, the clouds turned black and rained ashes upon them and shot super heated pyroclastic currants through the city, killing their population. Many died and some survived. After it was done, the survivors went back for their valuables but the next current came and wiped them out and the ash rained covering the once peaceful town from existence leaving only rubble and ruins.
Liam
Your final sentence is my favourite! Remember, 'their' shows that something belongs.
DeleteMrs Palmer
You give a good insight to a terrible event.
DeleteMrs Jordan
Yesterday a very dramatic eruption happened in Pompeii at midday, when Pompeii's so called protector called Mount Vesuvius erupted killing thousands of people. The sign began at midday when everyone was having their lunch and some were sleeping. Then a tower of grey and black smoke raised from the top of the volcano changing the clouds.
ReplyDeleteZainab
Zainab, your writing has improved a great deal this week - well done!
DeleteMrs Palmer
The volcano erupted then hot red lava and boiling ash spread out everywhere. People were rushing and they ran out of breath. After a few hours Pompeii was covered in a sea of ash. Homes were destroyed and the town was full of rubble and only a handful of people were found alive.
ReplyDeleteCaden
Great use of adjectives. I love how you try to capture what it was like for people during that time- Well done!
DeleteMiss Cannon
The volcano has erupted .Pompeii is distraught people have died. A dramatic eruption happened on the 24th off august at 1:00pm midday in Pompeii . The
ReplyDeletemagnificent volcano has erupted there was ash,lava and loads more rubbish was pouring out off the volcano.
Emily
I like the words distraught, dramatic and magnificent, Emily.
DeleteMrs Palmer
Today disaster struck Pompeii with ash falling down from the pitch black sky.
ReplyDeleteMany screams have come upon us as our beloved Pompeii is buried in a layer of
molten rock and ash. It has reduced Pompeii to a population of zero percent.
There are no remains. I hope in the future people discover this amazing city.
Brandan S
This sounds very dramatic, Brandan!
DeleteMrs Palmer
Before Mount Vesuvius erupted there was a tower of black smoke in the air and ash mass. There was rivers of ash, houses on fire and there wasn't a trace of escaping Pompeii.
ReplyDeleteMore info ----]Mount Vesuvius erupted like a Bazooka in AD-79. First Mount Vesuvius killed 2 thousand people.
Gary
That's an excellent description. I particularly like 'erupted like a bazooka'.
DeleteMr Palmer
The eruption of Mount Versuvius was terrifying, everybody was shocked seeing Mount Versusius turning into a monsters volcano. It wasn't the ash that killed them it was the heat that killed them.
ReplyDeleteKash
Kash
Lava was going down the side of the volcano. People were crying because people were dying. They wouldn't calm down for two hours. It blasted in the air with thunder. This is the worst disaster ever. people could not escape from the dark black ash chase. yusuf
ReplyDeleteI like how 'thunder' describes the sound of the eruption. Perhaps 'blasted like thunder' would have sounded better?
DeleteMrs Palmer
Then at noon the volcano erupted sending ash and debris into the air; to be exact 1.5 million tons every second. Every one stared at the amazing spectacle of dancing fire, flickering in the moon lit air. But then day became night; the sky was as black as coal; covering the sky. The people of Pompeii thought it was a starless night, which brought DOOM TO ALL!...
ReplyDeleteKorben
Wow! I love the imagery of dancing fire, flickering in the moon-lit air and the sky as black as coal.
DeleteMrs Palmer
i like the hard work put into this, good job!
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