Friday 1 May 2015

At Sea

Y5 have studied a range of poetry this week including a piece called At Sea. Each line of this poem contains an adjective, a noun and a verb and describes a stormy day on the coast. We used the same format to write our own poems about the sea and other places we could describe lots about. Have we created a vivid image in your head?


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  1. Chloe1 May 2015 at 11:45

    Chloe
    The class room

    Untidy books scatter
    White boards giggle
    Snapped rulers fall
    Screeching board-pens write
    Hard time tables
    Lazy chairs rocking
    Naughty children talking
    Tired teachers crying!

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    1. Laura1 May 2015 at 12:07

      Chloe that really good!

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    2. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:15

      Great poem
      From Vanessa

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    3. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:26

      Chloe I think you did very well especially the last line with the alliteration on the last line

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    4. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:27

      I think you did very well on your poem especially the last line

      Emily

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    5. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:31

      I think you did very well on your poem especially the last line with the alliteration

      Emily

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  2. Luke1 May 2015 at 11:51

    Rainforest
    Exotic plants grow,
    Countless insects crawl,
    Lush grass swaying,
    Blazing sun burns,
    Amazing flowers waving,
    Rapid tigers fly,
    Jungle boss strolls,
    Green leaves flow,
    Unique birds glide,
    Wonderful colours shimmer,

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    1. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:06

      I love the rainforest idea. I can imagine a picture in my mind!
      From Jessica

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    2. Laura1 May 2015 at 12:07

      Luke this is a really good poem it's paints a big bold image in my head!

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    3. Tanya1 May 2015 at 17:54

      I love the title Luke because it sums up the whole poem it is incredible🌲🌳🍃

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    4. chloe15 May 2015 at 08:00

      Luke yours is so good ive got a picture in my head

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    5. Mrs Palmer's Mom12 June 2015 at 21:58

      All very descriptive lines Luke. It sounds like you have been there ! Well done

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  3. Tanya1 May 2015 at 11:52

    Space

    Scoulding comet zooming,
    Blinding sun glowing,
    Shimmering stars shining,
    Spherical planets orbiting,
    Lifeless darkness hovering,
    Vast galaxy glowing,
    Magnificent rocks sliding,
    Ponderous meteors rumbling,
    Glistening space-shuttle gleaming,
    Polished satellites soaring.

    Tanya

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    1. Laura1 May 2015 at 12:08

      Tanya this paints a strong image in my head

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    2. Tanya1 May 2015 at 12:15

      You created a strong image

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    3. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:16

      Amazing poem
      By Vanessa

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    4. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:18

      I really enjoyed reading this poem


      By Sunny & Kash

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    5. Tanya's mom.1 May 2015 at 17:46

      I think this poem is good Tanya.

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    6. Mrs Palmer's Mom12 June 2015 at 21:59

      Well done Tanya. You describe lots of different elements very well, Very imaginative.

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  4. Laura1 May 2015 at 11:53

    In The Classroom
    Disturbed children shouting,
    Annoyed teacher despairing,
    Messy books scattered,
    Organised classroom ruined,
    Chaotic tables gathering,
    Wooden chairs squeaking,
    Damaged boards snap,
    Wrecked boardpens leak,
    Battered boardrubbers rip,
    It's been a long day...✏️
    By Laura

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    1. Luke1 May 2015 at 12:01

      Really like this poem it's amazing well done

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    2. Laura1 May 2015 at 12:05

      Thank you!

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    3. Madison1 May 2015 at 12:06

      Well done Laura I felt as if I was in that class room (thankfully I wasn't really in there)

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    4. Chloe1 May 2015 at 12:10

      That's really good laura

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    5. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:16

      I liked this poem because it's got some interesting words in the poem


      By Sunny & Kash

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    6. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:17

      Cool poem I really like it.
      By vanessa

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    7. Mrs Palmer's Mom12 June 2015 at 22:01

      Lots of different things described, but all building a picture, and I like the way you ended it.

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  5. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 11:54

    Mother Nature

    Emerald leaves glide
    Delightful children wonder
    Relaxed river shimmers
    Adorable animals play
    Frozen weather arrives
    Relaxing lake disappears
    Enormous bears hibernate
    Tweeting birds migrate
    Iced trees camouflage
    Soaking rain arrives
    Shadowy gates open
    Shimmering spotlight shines
    Emerald Spring arrives - again...

    By Jessica

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    1. Luke1 May 2015 at 12:02

      I read the first line and I loved it

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    2. Laura1 May 2015 at 12:06

      I agree! It's amazing

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    3. Chloe1 May 2015 at 12:08

      That's really good

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    4. Chloe1 May 2015 at 12:18

      I know it's cool

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    5. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:19

      Great poem I like it
      By vanessa

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    6. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:33

      This a great poem the first line already tells me what it is about by Jacob and Oliva

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    7. Anonymous31 May 2015 at 17:34

      Thank you for the complements every one

      By Jessica

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  6. Madison1 May 2015 at 11:55

    Something's following me ! 👻

    Wooden staircase creaks,
    Freaky music plays,
    Haunted clown falls,
    Horrifying shadows deepen,
    Burnt door slams,
    Daunting ghost glides,
    Charged atmosphere surrounds,
    Shrill screams sound,
    Vintage mirror cracks,
    Grotty nails scratch,
    I SWEAR SOMETHING IS FOLLOWING ME ! 👻

    By Madison.

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    1. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:08

      I love this poem I started to think something was following me!
      From Jessica

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    2. Laura1 May 2015 at 12:09

      Madison this amazing! You put a lot of thought into this!

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    3. Chloe1 May 2015 at 12:09

      That's really good

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    4. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:20

      Well done Madison ( by Olivia and Jacob )

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    5. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:33

      I love it Madi

      Cearagh

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  7. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 11:55

    Rainforest all mighty
    Weak battles found
    Moaning tribes scatter
    Wild rainforest lives
    Strengthening ocelot slits
    Weak river flows
    Dense trees crash
    Ferocious jaguar rages
    Weak toucan dives
    Charging rain hovers

    By Jacob

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    1. Laura1 May 2015 at 12:09

      Wow!

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    2. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:22

      I think I did the combination of words well (By Jacob)

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  8. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 11:56

    Best birthday party ever!!

    Deafening children roar
    Large cake splatters
    Sparkling sun laughs
    Loud plates clatters
    Blasting music screams
    Happy people cry
    Mouth-waltering cake runs
    Angry snacks overflow
    Happy winds drift
    Fizzy drinks explode

    By Emily

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    1. Laura1 May 2015 at 12:09

      Amazing!

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    2. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:17

      This is a Good poem it tells me a lot about what's going on

      By Jacob

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    3. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:22

      I think I did very well at this pease of work

      By Emily

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    4. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:31

      I really love this it puts a clear image in my mind, by Olivia and Jacob

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  9. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 11:57

    Misty wind blow
    Rapid waves crash
    Rusty garbage smell
    Massive seagle glide
    Poor animals die
    Deadly sharks lurk
    Dangerous mornings rush
    Multiple waves bash
    Gloomy clouds float
    Terrified children cried

    By Kash

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    1. Laura1 May 2015 at 12:09

      Brilliant!

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    2. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:10

      This is a good poem it really puts a picture in my mind

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    3. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:20

      I really really like this poem and what its about

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  10. Luke1 May 2015 at 11:59

    War. Forceful army loading,
    Overcrowded soldiers recruiting,
    Deafening rifles shooting,
    Hazardous snipers aiming,
    Rigid tanks firing,
    Rapid machine-guns spit,
    Misty smoke scatters,
    Camouflaged armour protects,
    Fired bullets dart,
    Launched grenades explode,
    Joyless war continues...

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    1. Tanya1 May 2015 at 12:06

      This poem has created a strong image in my mind

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    2. Laura1 May 2015 at 12:10

      I shed a little tear! This is amazing!

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    3. Tyler1 May 2015 at 12:13

      I love the cliff hanger at the end

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    4. Joel1 May 2015 at 12:16

      I like the cliff hanger at the end

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    5. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:28

      I love this it really puts a picture in my mind I really want to listen to more off you're work

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    6. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:29

      I love this Luke it puts a clear image in my head by Olivia and Jacob

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    7. Mrs Palmer's Mom12 June 2015 at 22:04

      Good work Luke. You show a good understanding of the subject as well as describing it well

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  11. Kodie1 May 2015 at 12:02

    Ice skating

    Ear-splitting music booms
    Gleaming disco-lights beam,
    Excited children stumble,
    Frozen feet skate,
    Happy voices sing-a-long,
    Shining skates spin,
    Booming speakers bang,
    Refreshing slush-puppies fill,
    Thirst-quenching water spills,
    Crazy adults dance,
    Now the day is over!

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    1. Tanya1 May 2015 at 16:23

      This is amazing

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    2. Jacey1 May 2015 at 21:48

      Well done that's amazing and you gave detail and it rhymes

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    3. Laura3 May 2015 at 21:05

      Kodie this so good! I love ice-skating and that's exactly what happens!

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    4. Vanessa12 June 2015 at 19:50

      Well done kodie

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  12. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:05

    The Pier

    Crowded pier standing
    Exited tourists gather
    Frantic roller coasters zooming
    Clean clouds hover
    Impatient youngsters crowding
    Gentle sea breaking
    Delicious food smells
    Gloomy darkness appears
    Dense clouds thicken
    Moaning visitors scatter
    Strengthening sea rises
    Lonely seaside clearing

    By Olivia

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  13. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:06

    Dangerous coast crashing,
    Frantic seagulls gliding,
    Vicious gales slicing,
    Treacherous rain interrupts,
    Treacherous cumulonimbos destroys,
    Rapid rain disintegrates.

    By Tonis

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  14. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:09

    War zone

    Deadly guns roaring
    Spinning helicopter destroyed
    Young men die
    Heavy tanks death
    Supersonic jets fly
    Thrown knives stabbed
    Explosive bomb explode
    Darkness destruction everywhere
    Unstoppable machine unstable
    Metal robots exterminate

    By Sunny

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    1. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:31

      I hope you do more fabulous poems

      By Kash

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    2. Anonymous22 May 2015 at 19:42

      well done sunny a bit violent, but good

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  15. Joel1 May 2015 at 12:11

    Last minute goal.

    Moody managers moaning,
    Loud crowds screaming,
    Delicious food eating,
    Uncontrollable players skidding ,
    Rockhard ball flying ,
    Fantastic players sprinting,
    Colourful seats sitting ,
    Screeching whistle blows ,
    Dirty fouls given,
    Last minute goal,
    Away fans celebrating!

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    1. Tanya1 May 2015 at 16:40

      It creates a strong image

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    2. Lewis24 May 2015 at 11:53

      WOW! This is cool
      Aston Villa

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  16. Tyler1 May 2015 at 12:11

    War.

    Deafening guns shooting
    Blistering fire spitting
    Misty smoke scatters
    Camouflaged armour protects
    Noisy horses neighing
    Massive tanks spreading
    Incendary bombs exploding
    War.

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  17. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:12

    The Plane Ride

    Cheerful people laughing
    Rumbling aeroplane departs
    Creaking wheels rolling
    Sturdy wings rising
    Deafening children chattering
    Annoyed adults moaning
    Buzzing phones shaking
    Old couple complaining
    Glossy sun shining
    Occupied attendants tripping
    Grimey floor cluttering
    Vast wings wobbling
    Depressed children crying
    Melodic music singing
    Delighted parents yelping
    Shiny aeroplane descending
    Weighty door slides

    By Kishari



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  18. Millie1 May 2015 at 12:13

    Haunted House

    Rocking chair creaks,
    Night sky falls,
    Ghostly doll screams,
    Spooky trees sway,
    Quietly doors screeching,
    Crazy woman laughing,
    Wooden floorboards knocking,
    Chilling lullaby sings,
    Ghostly radio plays,
    Never go into this house!



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  19. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:14

    Clans in battle

    under-attaked village petrified
    Terrified builders running
    Huge town hall crashed
    Small builder-huts smashed
    Steel cannons exploding
    Wooden archer-towers demolishing
    Hostile barbarian-king ruling
    Proud archer-queen tackling
    Fierce barbarians battling
    Skilful archers shooting
    Strong Clans fighting

    By Gary

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  20. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:16

    STORM AT SEA!!!

    Icy gusts blowing,
    Freezing percific splashes,
    Raging sharks swim,
    Wiry sun wavers,
    Dense mist thickens,
    Groaning visitors scatter,
    Dangerous waves distroy,
    Glimmering marines dive,
    Tall sailor floats,
    Gigantic sub crashes,
    Darkening clouds drench,
    Enraged waves crash,
    Gloomy sky takes-over.

    By Cory-lee

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  21. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:18

    Football

    Sweating setting scoring
    Called crowd clapping
    Grassy goal kick
    Ready raining volleys
    Poser players celebration
    Singing goal keeper headers
    Amazing manager shouted

    By Caden

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  22. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:21

    Sea Journey

    Treacherous Cumulonimbus Destroying,
    Atlantic Waves Hissing,
    Sly Seagulls Stealing,
    Drowsy Children Screeching,
    Piercing Tourists Chattering,
    Deafening Fairs Chorusing,
    Flying Foam Floats,
    Foolish Tourguides Scampering,
    Frazzled Dogs Howling,
    Menacing Heavens Parting,
    Startled Sharks Dashing.

    By: Cearagh😸

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    1. Elise1 May 2015 at 16:27

      I like that poem very much cearagh it is very thought provoking

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    2. tanya5 May 2015 at 16:43

      I LOVE the thought of cumulinimbus

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  23. Laila1 May 2015 at 12:25

    Here Comes Spring!
    Dancing butterflies swirl,
    Peaceful rivers shimmer,
    Beautiful flowers bloom,
    Icy wind's passed,
    Growing grass smells,
    Colourful plants multiply,
    Relaxed trees wake,
    Wet leaves sink,
    Loud children laugh,
    Frozen weather flees,
    Here come spring!

    Laila

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    1. jessica5 June 2015 at 19:28

      grate poem it was the best one.

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    2. vanessa5 June 2015 at 19:31

      well done
      by vanessa

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  24. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:29

    horrors in the classroom!

    Annoying students snigger,
    Dorky brats sneer,
    Childish teens whinge,
    Terrible teachers terarise,
    Blinding whiteboard shines,
    Complicated spellings comfuse,
    Flimsy paper rips,
    Dazzling sunlight disappear,
    Dreadful class distract,
    Hair-raising headteachers howl,
    Nervewracking assessments approach,
    Razor-sharp pencils piece,
    Vile glue hardens,
    Unusable pens expire,
    Unreadable writing worsening,
    Eye-catching colour decends,
    Beastly substitutes whip,
    Creepy classmates glare,
    Ear-aching bells ring,
    Fabulous playtime nears,
    Hopping playtimes forever!

    By Alex

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  25. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:29

    I'm proud of myself

    Cearagh

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  26. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:31

    Great poem I love the adjectives


    Kishari

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  27. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:32



    Dramatic Day

    Glooming clouds hovers-by,
    Frantic ocean sways,
    Weak sand draining,
    Dramatic atmosphere fading,
    Wild wind sways,
    Treacherous cumulonimbus destroys,
    Cold despondency settles,
    Gloomy clouds sway,
    Threatening waves whoosh,
    Vicious gales slicing,
    Treacherous rain interruptes,
    Terrified tourists tumble.

    By Alex.B

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  28. Anonymous1 May 2015 at 12:35

    Fantastic food

    Bunching berries burst
    Chewing chicken chills
    Popping Pepsi pounce
    Sweet strawberrys slither
    Jiggling jelly jumps
    Prickly pineapples pick
    Biting burgers burp
    Cool coke crash
    Licking lollies launch
    Sucking sweats spin
    Annoying apples argue
    Bouncing bubblegum bash
    Nasty nuggets nag
    happy ham hang
    Singing sandwiches speak
    Hopping Harrison's halt
    Cooking cookeis care

    By yusuf

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  29. Mr Hall1 June 2015 at 08:36

    Well done Yusuf - original ideas!

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