Y5 have studied a range of poetry this week including a piece called
At Sea. Each line of this poem contains an adjective, a noun and a verb and describes a stormy day on the coast. We used the same format to write our own poems about the sea and other places we could describe lots about. Have we created a vivid image in your head?
Chloe
ReplyDeleteThe class room
Untidy books scatter
White boards giggle
Snapped rulers fall
Screeching board-pens write
Hard time tables
Lazy chairs rocking
Naughty children talking
Tired teachers crying!
Chloe that really good!
DeleteGreat poem
DeleteFrom Vanessa
Chloe I think you did very well especially the last line with the alliteration on the last line
DeleteI think you did very well on your poem especially the last line
DeleteEmily
I think you did very well on your poem especially the last line with the alliteration
DeleteEmily
Rainforest
ReplyDeleteExotic plants grow,
Countless insects crawl,
Lush grass swaying,
Blazing sun burns,
Amazing flowers waving,
Rapid tigers fly,
Jungle boss strolls,
Green leaves flow,
Unique birds glide,
Wonderful colours shimmer,
I love the rainforest idea. I can imagine a picture in my mind!
DeleteFrom Jessica
Luke this is a really good poem it's paints a big bold image in my head!
DeleteI love the title Luke because it sums up the whole poem it is incredible🌲🌳🍃
DeleteLuke yours is so good ive got a picture in my head
DeleteAll very descriptive lines Luke. It sounds like you have been there ! Well done
DeleteSpace
ReplyDeleteScoulding comet zooming,
Blinding sun glowing,
Shimmering stars shining,
Spherical planets orbiting,
Lifeless darkness hovering,
Vast galaxy glowing,
Magnificent rocks sliding,
Ponderous meteors rumbling,
Glistening space-shuttle gleaming,
Polished satellites soaring.
Tanya
Tanya this paints a strong image in my head
DeleteYou created a strong image
DeleteAmazing poem
DeleteBy Vanessa
I really enjoyed reading this poem
DeleteBy Sunny & Kash
I think this poem is good Tanya.
DeleteWell done Tanya. You describe lots of different elements very well, Very imaginative.
DeleteIn The Classroom
ReplyDeleteDisturbed children shouting,
Annoyed teacher despairing,
Messy books scattered,
Organised classroom ruined,
Chaotic tables gathering,
Wooden chairs squeaking,
Damaged boards snap,
Wrecked boardpens leak,
Battered boardrubbers rip,
It's been a long day...✏️
By Laura
Really like this poem it's amazing well done
DeleteThank you!
DeleteWell done Laura I felt as if I was in that class room (thankfully I wasn't really in there)
DeleteThat's really good laura
DeleteI liked this poem because it's got some interesting words in the poem
DeleteBy Sunny & Kash
Cool poem I really like it.
DeleteBy vanessa
Lots of different things described, but all building a picture, and I like the way you ended it.
DeleteMother Nature
ReplyDeleteEmerald leaves glide
Delightful children wonder
Relaxed river shimmers
Adorable animals play
Frozen weather arrives
Relaxing lake disappears
Enormous bears hibernate
Tweeting birds migrate
Iced trees camouflage
Soaking rain arrives
Shadowy gates open
Shimmering spotlight shines
Emerald Spring arrives - again...
By Jessica
I read the first line and I loved it
DeleteI agree! It's amazing
DeleteThat's really good
DeleteI know it's cool
DeleteGreat poem I like it
DeleteBy vanessa
This a great poem the first line already tells me what it is about by Jacob and Oliva
DeleteThank you for the complements every one
DeleteBy Jessica
Something's following me ! 👻
ReplyDeleteWooden staircase creaks,
Freaky music plays,
Haunted clown falls,
Horrifying shadows deepen,
Burnt door slams,
Daunting ghost glides,
Charged atmosphere surrounds,
Shrill screams sound,
Vintage mirror cracks,
Grotty nails scratch,
I SWEAR SOMETHING IS FOLLOWING ME ! 👻
By Madison.
I love this poem I started to think something was following me!
DeleteFrom Jessica
Madison this amazing! You put a lot of thought into this!
DeleteThat's really good
DeleteWell done Madison ( by Olivia and Jacob )
DeleteI love it Madi
DeleteCearagh
Rainforest all mighty
ReplyDeleteWeak battles found
Moaning tribes scatter
Wild rainforest lives
Strengthening ocelot slits
Weak river flows
Dense trees crash
Ferocious jaguar rages
Weak toucan dives
Charging rain hovers
By Jacob
Wow!
DeleteI think I did the combination of words well (By Jacob)
DeleteBest birthday party ever!!
ReplyDeleteDeafening children roar
Large cake splatters
Sparkling sun laughs
Loud plates clatters
Blasting music screams
Happy people cry
Mouth-waltering cake runs
Angry snacks overflow
Happy winds drift
Fizzy drinks explode
By Emily
Amazing!
DeleteThis is a Good poem it tells me a lot about what's going on
DeleteBy Jacob
I think I did very well at this pease of work
DeleteBy Emily
I really love this it puts a clear image in my mind, by Olivia and Jacob
DeleteMisty wind blow
ReplyDeleteRapid waves crash
Rusty garbage smell
Massive seagle glide
Poor animals die
Deadly sharks lurk
Dangerous mornings rush
Multiple waves bash
Gloomy clouds float
Terrified children cried
By Kash
Brilliant!
DeleteThis is a good poem it really puts a picture in my mind
DeleteI really really like this poem and what its about
DeleteWar. Forceful army loading,
ReplyDeleteOvercrowded soldiers recruiting,
Deafening rifles shooting,
Hazardous snipers aiming,
Rigid tanks firing,
Rapid machine-guns spit,
Misty smoke scatters,
Camouflaged armour protects,
Fired bullets dart,
Launched grenades explode,
Joyless war continues...
This poem has created a strong image in my mind
DeleteI shed a little tear! This is amazing!
DeleteI love the cliff hanger at the end
DeleteI like the cliff hanger at the end
DeleteI love this it really puts a picture in my mind I really want to listen to more off you're work
DeleteI love this Luke it puts a clear image in my head by Olivia and Jacob
DeleteGood work Luke. You show a good understanding of the subject as well as describing it well
DeleteIce skating
ReplyDeleteEar-splitting music booms
Gleaming disco-lights beam,
Excited children stumble,
Frozen feet skate,
Happy voices sing-a-long,
Shining skates spin,
Booming speakers bang,
Refreshing slush-puppies fill,
Thirst-quenching water spills,
Crazy adults dance,
Now the day is over!
This is amazing
DeleteWell done that's amazing and you gave detail and it rhymes
DeleteKodie this so good! I love ice-skating and that's exactly what happens!
DeleteWell done kodie
DeleteThe Pier
ReplyDeleteCrowded pier standing
Exited tourists gather
Frantic roller coasters zooming
Clean clouds hover
Impatient youngsters crowding
Gentle sea breaking
Delicious food smells
Gloomy darkness appears
Dense clouds thicken
Moaning visitors scatter
Strengthening sea rises
Lonely seaside clearing
By Olivia
Dangerous coast crashing,
ReplyDeleteFrantic seagulls gliding,
Vicious gales slicing,
Treacherous rain interrupts,
Treacherous cumulonimbos destroys,
Rapid rain disintegrates.
By Tonis
War zone
ReplyDeleteDeadly guns roaring
Spinning helicopter destroyed
Young men die
Heavy tanks death
Supersonic jets fly
Thrown knives stabbed
Explosive bomb explode
Darkness destruction everywhere
Unstoppable machine unstable
Metal robots exterminate
By Sunny
I hope you do more fabulous poems
DeleteBy Kash
well done sunny a bit violent, but good
DeleteLast minute goal.
ReplyDeleteMoody managers moaning,
Loud crowds screaming,
Delicious food eating,
Uncontrollable players skidding ,
Rockhard ball flying ,
Fantastic players sprinting,
Colourful seats sitting ,
Screeching whistle blows ,
Dirty fouls given,
Last minute goal,
Away fans celebrating!
It creates a strong image
DeleteWOW! This is cool
DeleteAston Villa
War.
ReplyDeleteDeafening guns shooting
Blistering fire spitting
Misty smoke scatters
Camouflaged armour protects
Noisy horses neighing
Massive tanks spreading
Incendary bombs exploding
War.
Very good (cory)!!!
DeleteThe Plane Ride
ReplyDeleteCheerful people laughing
Rumbling aeroplane departs
Creaking wheels rolling
Sturdy wings rising
Deafening children chattering
Annoyed adults moaning
Buzzing phones shaking
Old couple complaining
Glossy sun shining
Occupied attendants tripping
Grimey floor cluttering
Vast wings wobbling
Depressed children crying
Melodic music singing
Delighted parents yelping
Shiny aeroplane descending
Weighty door slides
By Kishari
Haunted House
ReplyDeleteRocking chair creaks,
Night sky falls,
Ghostly doll screams,
Spooky trees sway,
Quietly doors screeching,
Crazy woman laughing,
Wooden floorboards knocking,
Chilling lullaby sings,
Ghostly radio plays,
Never go into this house!
Clans in battle
ReplyDeleteunder-attaked village petrified
Terrified builders running
Huge town hall crashed
Small builder-huts smashed
Steel cannons exploding
Wooden archer-towers demolishing
Hostile barbarian-king ruling
Proud archer-queen tackling
Fierce barbarians battling
Skilful archers shooting
Strong Clans fighting
By Gary
STORM AT SEA!!!
ReplyDeleteIcy gusts blowing,
Freezing percific splashes,
Raging sharks swim,
Wiry sun wavers,
Dense mist thickens,
Groaning visitors scatter,
Dangerous waves distroy,
Glimmering marines dive,
Tall sailor floats,
Gigantic sub crashes,
Darkening clouds drench,
Enraged waves crash,
Gloomy sky takes-over.
By Cory-lee
Football
ReplyDeleteSweating setting scoring
Called crowd clapping
Grassy goal kick
Ready raining volleys
Poser players celebration
Singing goal keeper headers
Amazing manager shouted
By Caden
Sea Journey
ReplyDeleteTreacherous Cumulonimbus Destroying,
Atlantic Waves Hissing,
Sly Seagulls Stealing,
Drowsy Children Screeching,
Piercing Tourists Chattering,
Deafening Fairs Chorusing,
Flying Foam Floats,
Foolish Tourguides Scampering,
Frazzled Dogs Howling,
Menacing Heavens Parting,
Startled Sharks Dashing.
By: Cearagh😸
I like that poem very much cearagh it is very thought provoking
DeleteI LOVE the thought of cumulinimbus
DeleteHere Comes Spring!
ReplyDeleteDancing butterflies swirl,
Peaceful rivers shimmer,
Beautiful flowers bloom,
Icy wind's passed,
Growing grass smells,
Colourful plants multiply,
Relaxed trees wake,
Wet leaves sink,
Loud children laugh,
Frozen weather flees,
Here come spring!
Laila
grate poem it was the best one.
Deletewell done
Deleteby vanessa
horrors in the classroom!
ReplyDeleteAnnoying students snigger,
Dorky brats sneer,
Childish teens whinge,
Terrible teachers terarise,
Blinding whiteboard shines,
Complicated spellings comfuse,
Flimsy paper rips,
Dazzling sunlight disappear,
Dreadful class distract,
Hair-raising headteachers howl,
Nervewracking assessments approach,
Razor-sharp pencils piece,
Vile glue hardens,
Unusable pens expire,
Unreadable writing worsening,
Eye-catching colour decends,
Beastly substitutes whip,
Creepy classmates glare,
Ear-aching bells ring,
Fabulous playtime nears,
Hopping playtimes forever!
By Alex
I'm proud of myself
ReplyDeleteCearagh
Great poem I love the adjectives
ReplyDeleteKishari
ReplyDeleteDramatic Day
Glooming clouds hovers-by,
Frantic ocean sways,
Weak sand draining,
Dramatic atmosphere fading,
Wild wind sways,
Treacherous cumulonimbus destroys,
Cold despondency settles,
Gloomy clouds sway,
Threatening waves whoosh,
Vicious gales slicing,
Treacherous rain interruptes,
Terrified tourists tumble.
By Alex.B
Fantastic food
ReplyDeleteBunching berries burst
Chewing chicken chills
Popping Pepsi pounce
Sweet strawberrys slither
Jiggling jelly jumps
Prickly pineapples pick
Biting burgers burp
Cool coke crash
Licking lollies launch
Sucking sweats spin
Annoying apples argue
Bouncing bubblegum bash
Nasty nuggets nag
happy ham hang
Singing sandwiches speak
Hopping Harrison's halt
Cooking cookeis care
By yusuf
Well done Yusuf - original ideas!
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