Tearful, Agatha stumbled into the empty attic library. The floorboards creaked as she waltzed alone, dancing out of the shadows into the sunlight. Abruptly, she paused. There by the dark fireplace lay a dusty old book. Picking it up, she blew the dust off and saw the title. Gasping, she dropped it!
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It was a spell book,amazed Agatha picked up the book and flicked through the crisp,old pages her eyes widening as she goes through the pages.Then she stops she sees a blank page with nothing on it,the page also is clean white.Agatha slams the book closed and stuffs it in her bag and runs home.Later that day there was a massive thunder storm while agatha was downstairs with her parents she had left her bedroom window open and the spell book mysteriously flew out of the window and back into tha library attic.It was time for Agatha to go upstairs because it was her bedtime,the next day Agathas mum came to wake her up but Agatha was missing...where was Agatha?
ReplyDeleteLaura, some effective word choices. I like crisp, eyes widening, slams and stuffs. Good use of an ellipsis and a question at the end.
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The title was "Hauntings in the 21st Sentry". She picked up the book a second time and... opened it! Mysterious creatures were coming out of the book, they were ghosts. As she flicked the pages even more ghosts were entering the human world. Agatha heard someone coming. She tried to close the book. It would not close! The footsteps were getting louder by the minute!
ReplyDelete"Who is there?"Agatha wondered.
"It is me, your farther." her farther answered. "We are going home now!"
Quickly, Agatha snook the book into her bag, and ran out the attic,down the stairs and out the library doors. But, Agatha did not know that ghosts were still leaking out of the book. Later that day, Agatha was in her bedroom, and out of no where appeared a beautiful guardian-angle.
The guardian-angle touched Agatha, the guardian-angle then disappeared. Agatha was changing, wings were growing on her smooth, silky back, she was turning into the thing that she always wanted to be... a guardian-angle.
She put her hands on her window, trying to seek the guardian-angle. But all she could see was ghosts. She was trying to open the window, then a light came from Agatha's hand and circled the ghosts. In less than a minute the ghosts disappeared, she finally found out that she had powers.
Three years later, everything was back to to normal and no ghost was to be seen ever again.
by Jessica
Wow! What a creative idea, Jess. Excellent effort for homework. You could have left the reader with questions rather than trying to finish the story in a hurry.
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Sorry I forgot.
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It was a book that told the future! She picked it back up and turned the page... Agatha saw herself painting a picture which had a rose on. She came back from the attic library and came down for her lunch. A couple minutes later, she had finished her lunch. " Mum. I'm bored"Agatha whined. "How about you use your grandfather's paints?"replied Agatha's mum."fine then" answerd Agatha. Agatha went outside with the paints and found a rose. "I could paint that" Agatha thought so she started painting. When it was finished she showed her mum."MUM MUM LOOK WHAT I HAVE DONE!"screamed Agatha."Well done that is very detailed!"Agatha's mum congratulated. They jumped up and down, but then they jumped so hard that the book turned a page...
ReplyDeleteI need to know more of the story!
DeleteAgatha had always been rude to her mum.But this time she took it to far because she was being mean to thd houst guuestand her mum boomed at her and told her to go to her room. She dumped her luggage and she found a old book.It had two trails and one of led to ths future and one led to the past.She chose the past because she wanted to know why her mother was being so mean to her.she found out because she through a cake at her true love and they broke up.She went back and apologise to her mum.the end
DeleteJoel, I like how you have explored the history of your characters. I also like the word boomed as an alternative for said. Read and edit your work before publishing.
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What an original idea, Luke. I wonder what will appear on the next page of the book.
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Agatha flicked though the pages of the ancient book .The book was imprinted with weird Egyptian signs , the book had reminded her of a place a time.Then all of a sudden her phone vibrated a text popped on her phone her mum needed her home because her grandma was coming over for dinner.Abruptly,she stuffed the book in her bag and silently tiptoed back down the winding staircase across the creaky floor boards and though the the old door.Agatha quickly sped out the library.When she arrived home she did not bother to tell her mum she would not believe Agatha anyway.She stumbled up into her bedroom and yanked out the dusty book she read out loud but as she read sand came from under her door she stopped reading.Then she heard someone mumble her name Agatha felt dizzy her room started spinning she closed her eyes,when she opened them again she was in a desert what had happened to her.Agatha started to look around but all she saw was sand sand and guess what more sand.She had to find a way out
ReplyDeletebut how?The sky was a deep blue shade that went on for ever and little mounds of sound were everywhere,the sun was blazing all over her skin she felt all sweaty she had no idea where she was.Agatha was lost.
kishari
Kishari, I like your edingly starter (abruptly) and the word yanked. I also like your short sentence at the end and the tension that you have built just before it. Well done. Think about your punctuation.
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I really enjoyed this Kishari. You have made me want to read more, which as a writer is a skilled thing to do indeed. Well Done!
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Agatha has all ways been rude to her mom so she had to go to her room but then she found a magical book so she decided to put a magical spell on her mom and then her mom disappeared in a flash. Then she realised that was a bad thing to do so she tried to get her mom back but she didn't know how then she had to get help but they didn't know so she didn't have a mom any more.
ReplyDeleteChloe, this is better than your first attempt because it's not just one long sentence. Try it again using more interesting words. For example:
DeleteAgatha stormed up to her bedroom in a rage and slammed the door closed. She had to get revenge.
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Okay miss palmer now I understand
DeleteAs Agatha picked up the dusty book she read the title again she had noticed that the book was from the Ancient Egyptian times.The book was wanted all over the world. Agatha thought I could make some money out of this old book.But there was one problem if her mother found out she would ground her for lying,and if her mother found out she wasn't lying her mother would keep the money all to her self.So Agatha hatched a plan . Her plan was to walk in the house normally , sneak to her bedroom and then look at the book then the next day go to a shop that tells you the price of books. So she went home as fast as she could she snuck up to her bedroom and read the book but it was in hieroglyphics .She went to sleep suddenly she was transported to Egypt!!!
ReplyDeleteI like your idea Tanya but I am usually more excited by your writing. How could you create tension?
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Tonis
ReplyDeleteThere she saw a mirror and in it was her, but on here write shoulder lerking there was something she has never seen before. It had teeth as sharp as dagers, hair as scruffy as a unclean dog, it was a devel/monkey it took a bite of Agatha then she was one of them as she slowly ternd ...
How creepy! I like the word lurking and the two similes you've used Tonis. I wouldn't like to see the illustrations that would go with this story!
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The title of the book read her own name(which was Agatha Lilac Rupert Gregor)and she was terrified because nobody(except her and her parents)knew her 2nd middle name.That night she barely slept a wink because she was having nightmares about what would happen now and if she should read it.The most frightening dream was when she finally got to sleep but sadly it wasn't a dream it was real life.
ReplyDeleteShe had woken up and just like a normal day and grabbed a stool to step on so she could reach the cheerios.Once she had finished eating her breakfast she went upstairs.And read the book!
"That's weird there aren't any words in here!"Agatha said suspiciously,"OH NO!"she gasped.the very last line of the very last page (written in blood)said:YOU ARE CURSED!!!What happened to Agatha?I hear you asking,well that is a story for another time...
I like how you have spoken directly to the reader, Cearagh. I also like the phrase, 'barely slept a wink'. Sometimes, a pair of commas might be more effective than brackets.
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Ok thanks for the feedback
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She slowly picked up the book and the title read The Big Book Of Untold Spells. She read each spell in her head but suddenly she came across one spell that stood out to her because it was so short. She now read this poem out loud, she did what the spell said like closing her eyes and turning around. Agatha then found herself face to face with a dinosaur ; she had travelled back in time to the Stone Age.she ran as fast as her legs could carry her and hid under a huge rock to escape crime the dinosaur. She noticed she was still holding the spell book and she saw a little not at the bottom saying reverse spell : page 23. She quickly flicked the pages and realised that page 23 had been ripped out.a tear trickled down Agatha's face and she wept "I'm never going to get home, I'm only ten I can't cope on my own"! She found a giant leaf and used it to blend in so the dinosaurs wouldn't find her. She then made a small shelter to keep her dry from the rain and wondered what she could do.... What could Agatha do?
ReplyDeleteWhat a creative idea, Madison! I like that you haven't rushed your story - you have taken time to explain the picture in your head. Remember to keep the final ? ! or , inside the inverted commas.
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I didn't mean to put crime in front of dinosaur
DeleteIt was a spell book. Agatha quickly rushed through the crinkly pages,but at that moment this one spell appeared to her.It was a disappearing spell.So she oviously said it,she tried to aim it to make her yellow pencil disappear.But it all went wrong,just in seconds Agatha disappeared and never was seen again....
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DeleteTearful, Agatha stumbled up the attic stairs not knowing where she was. She found a book she picked it up she read the title, she started reading the pages to herself then she eventually realized it was a spell book, suddenly she came to a blank page even though she came across one of these books before she didn't get to know what it meant?As Agatha was flicking through the pages she realized that page number 43 was missing, a tear strolled down Agatha's eye and it splashed off the page and then writing started to appear it seemed to her that it was like a diary entry that was about someones day at the beach. On the floor next to Agatha was a gold shimmering key she thought to herself well what could this be for she turned around and there was a huge brown old door she tried the key in the door and it worked. The door flew open and she was amazed by what she saw....
ReplyDeleteMillie, my favourite sentence is "a tear rolled down Agatha's cheek and it splashed off the page". It tells me so much about the character and the atmosphere. I also like how you have ended your paragraph. What did she see??
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